tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5297041564949900125.post7096644585084558427..comments2023-07-31T21:23:20.932-05:00Comments on Elsewhere Crows Are Laughing: havoc on the starsAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01884256302440323099noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5297041564949900125.post-18095423068173781082010-06-30T07:50:39.986-05:002010-06-30T07:50:39.986-05:00Thanks Arna and Hannah.
Hannah, I think you have ...Thanks Arna and Hannah.<br /><br />Hannah, I think you have a point about the ending of the poem. I struggled with it myself. In fact, it originally stopped after 5 stanzas; but that did not feel right. So I pushed on and I admit the 6th is easily stronger than the 7th. I think I will follow your advice. As it is, the final stanza leaves my shoulders slumped.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01884256302440323099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5297041564949900125.post-32077438088938155762010-06-30T07:21:52.574-05:002010-06-30T07:21:52.574-05:00Sweet; it's built so well, Jonathan. I'm t...Sweet; it's built so well, Jonathan. I'm trying to put my finger on what I like so much about the tone---a kind of consistent, clever clarity (ignore that wretched, unintended alliteration), all the way down until the last stanza.<br /><br />"the branches cricketing/ Havoc on the stars" is so stunning. I admit, I wish the poem ended there.Hannah VanderHarthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11524524060144621839noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5297041564949900125.post-31298207558287329052010-06-29T18:12:23.949-05:002010-06-29T18:12:23.949-05:00also a great poem.also a great poem.Arnahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11265593594331766626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5297041564949900125.post-12977387419178086612010-06-29T18:09:08.102-05:002010-06-29T18:09:08.102-05:00this is a beautiful poem.this is a beautiful poem.Arnahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11265593594331766626noreply@blogger.com